Best American Once a Year?

[mcooley]

Hi everyone,

Looking for some thoughts on this short article I am writing. The article is attached in the .pdf format.

Thanks!

[Steve in SLO]

Hey Mason,
Good, thought provoking article with good content. You need a proofer to go thru and smooth out the syntax and sentence structure. I think about 1/3 of your commas can be eliminated to make it flow better.
Where are you looking to get this published?
Steve
P.S. With only 5 post here and a recent thread about internet trolls on the forum, don't be surprised if you catch a little flak.

[mcooley]

Hi Steve,

Thanks for taking a look. Not sure where it will go once it is finished. I also appreciate the advice, we'll see how the editing process goes - the article is short and so keeping it succinct is important.

m

[WadePatton]

yo, like i started, to, look at it, but, then i went into commatose. :D ;)

work on the sentence structure and hit us with a revision. if you'd like some sample re-writes, complete with technical reference-just ask. i'll do a few.

methinks pm/email would be the best place for that sort of stuff.

always happy to help folks use the english language more effectively. it was my undergrad minor.